Michel Fortin: Short Copy Outperforms? Heresy!

by Jack Humphrey on Aug 18

Guest Post By Michel Fortin

fortin.jpgAn interesting discussion is going on in one of my favorite online forums, The Warriors Forum, about short copy winning over long copy. And the author of the thread cited a study he conducted, where he proved that shorter copy won over long copy.

Some people are screaming “heresy!” Others agreed.

Personally, I believe the study conducted is indeed valid because it makes sense. In this particular case, short copy was warranted for this particular market with this particular offer.

But is this true in all cases? When you look at his study closer, you realize that it lacks information about the variables involved, which makes the study, and its findings, a bit misleading.

Here’s what I mean.

I truly believe that long copy sells better than short copy. But I base my opinion on the average, not the universal. Because, in some cases, shorter copy does sell better. But there are very specific reasons for this, and I want to go over a few of the important ones that I see all the time.

However, before I give you some of those reasons (and there are many, which I cannot go through in the scope of this one article), I’d like to make a distinction, if I could, so you understand the factors that come into play.

When people often look at short copy, even test it and then realize that it works better than long copy, there are many variables that one fails to look at. The price, the industry and particularly the target market play a significant role.

But there are also two others that I’d like to go over today: a) the product category or type, and b) the pre-selling process (i.e., the mindset of the market).

First, the product type.

When I used to teach marketing principles in college (part of the Business Administration curriculum at Algonquin College in Ottawa, Canada), my students learned that there are four textbook categories of products:

  • Convenience products
  • Shopping products
  • Specialty products
  • Unsought products

Each product category has a different sales process and marketing requirement. Why? Because the level of commoditization of the product delineates how much marketing, promotion and relationship-building is required to sell the product.

(And when I say “marketing,” I mean all types of marketing, from branding to pricing to availability to distribution.)

To give you some examples, a “convenience product” is one often purchased to fulfill immediate needs. The purchase is done at an almost unconscious level, too. Pricing is often moderate to low, and brand equity, reputation and relationships do not make a big difference if any.

The product has penetrated the market en masse. It is widely available. And more often than not, convenience products are impulse purchases. They are also staples, in most cases.

Take, for example, bread, milk, batteries, etc. These are often the types of products you find in convenience stores or in the supermarket checkout lines, where people just grab them and add them to their orders just because “they’re there.”

No real thought has been given into making the buying decision. Price may either be low or a non-issue, in most cases. And copy, if any is used, will be relatively short and brief. A small POP display (point of purchase stand, cardboard ad, logo with product name and description, etc) is all that’s required.

As for “shopping products,” those are less commoditized products. They are a little higher in price. A little more thought is required into making the purchase. And people tend to “shop around” when deciding on buying such products.

They either weigh the pros and cons before buying it, or they make the decision to buy relatively quickly — albeit less quickly than a convenience product.

Other times, they take a bit of time to decide, depending on the price, the availability and the market. They will analyze first, and they often require a bit more copy to gather enough information to justify their decision.

Products like cars, appliances, computers, etc are shopping products. (They can be more or less in price too, such as videos, movies, homes, vacations, even software and online services.)

As such, a little longer copy is required, often to differentiate the product from its competitors, and sell the uniqueness and the specific benefits of the product.

Third is the “specialty product.” This is a product that definitely needs more copy and a lot of selling is required. Specialty products are higher priced, highly targeted and more valuable — especially for very specific target markets.

(That is, they might not be of any value for others but of high value for a select group of individuals.)

Exotic goods, luxury cars, expensive jewelry, art and so on are specialty items. Take Mont-Blanc pens, Porsche cars and Pearson yachts, for example.

(A popular magazine is the Robb Report, which is a magazine for the affluent. Take a look at some of the ads in it, and you’ll see exactly what I mean.)

In my marketing classes, the example given was a particular brand of gourmet bread that was gluten-free, created with an exotic herd of mountain sheep’s milk grazing on the alpine slopes, flavored with rare spices and condiments grown in the Amazon jungle, fire-oven baked to very specific temperatures, and gift-wrapped inside a special, ornamentally carved wooden box shipped directly to people’s doors.

(And yes, a loaf can cost you up to $500 each.)

Therefore, longer copy is definitely needed in this case. The goal would be not to differentiate it from its competition (since there’s very little of it) but to create value, justify the purchase and add reasons why.

In other words, why would someone pay $500 for a loaf of bread? There are very specific individuals who would and very specific reasons they would, too.

Finally, “unsought products” are exactly that: unsought. Products that no one would have ever known about or looked for. Now, this doesn’t mean exotic and fancy products, either. This means products people don’t necessarily look for or believe they don’t need. At first.

Preventative type products fall in that category (i.e., life insurance, pre-arranged funeral services, financial investment services, etc). Almost all information products fall in that category too, by the way. (If not, they probably fall in the “specialty” category.)

Consequently, long copy is a must in these cases. And the copy is not only meant to differentiate, add value and justify the purchase, but also to create a need and a desire for the product.

What I mean is, you need a lot of copy to educate the market on why they need (and subsequently want) this type of product. You need a lot of copy to really build a compelling case for buying it.

Granted, these categories are not universal. Because another element comes in, which is the second one in my list mentioned earlier.

And that is, the process.

The process can help identify, isolate or even create certain markets (and therefore certain mindsets) that will buy a product with more or less copy. And that process is not limited to words — or to selling itself, for that matter.

Long copy is often attributed to a long copy salesletter. But that is not often the case. Copy is not limited to a salesletter or website. It can often take many forms, take place over time, and communicated and delivered in many different ways.

When all added, they take the form of, and replace, a long copy salesletter that would otherwise be required if none of these other steps were taken.

For example, if you have an affiliate program, then your affiliates can and should “pre-sell” the product for you. Their “copy,” in other words, is part of the entire sales engine. When they hit your site, and if they’re highly targeted and qualified from moment they hit it, then you need less copy to sell them.

In fact, if your affiliates did their jobs right, they’ve already sold your prospects even before they read your copy.

Even if your affiliate (or even yourself, when you sell to an established list of paying clients) doesn’t use a lot of copy to pre-sell, the “uncommunicated” copy was delivered in the form of building the brand (and that brand can also be you and your expertise), trust, credibility and relationships.

For example, when you promote a new product to an established audience (or if your affiliates promote your product to their established lists), a relationship already exists. The process didn’t start with that promotion but a long time ago.

How many times have you already sold this audience in the past? If you have done so, particularly several times, the likelihood that little copy will be required for the next promotion.

You don’t need copy to build credibility or educate your market, in this case, because that job has already been done.

In other words, copy was already used, albeit indirectly.

How much copy in other promotions have you used? How many times did they read your articles, websites and blog posts before they bought from you? How great is the relationship you created with them before you sold them anything? How much did they read about, learned from and educated themselves on: you, your expertise, your business or even your affiliates’ businesses?

That’s copy. All of it.

It’s all part of the sales process. And “copy,” in the case of selling to an established, qualified market, didn’t start with that salesletter. It started a long time ago through other means.

Try to sell to a brand new market for the first time, one who has never heard of you, and you’ll need copy. Lots of it.

Hire a sales representative to sell for you, and that’s copy too, albeit delivered incrementally, in different ways, over time. For example, include all the prospecting steps, qualification questions, needs analyses, phone calls, sales presentations, written proposals, objections handled, and closing attempts the salesperson did.

But it’s still all one big piece of copy. Remove all of those steps and start fresh with just a salesletter, and you will definitely need a long copy salesletter. Without question.

In other words, if you had to replace all those steps with just one, the process would have taken the form of one long-copy salesletter.

Finally, there’s also a correlation between my two points, i.e., between product categories and processes.

Because a product, which may at first be an unsought product — with a bit of copy, awareness, brand equity and credibility built over time — can change and be promoted to another category.

They can go from unsought, to specialty, to shopping, and even to convenience, after a specific point in the sales/life cycle.

Take bottled water, for instance.

Bottled water was once unsought when it was first introduced. Over time, it became a specialty product. After a while, it then became a shopping product.

(And in some cases, I’d even venture to say that bottled water is now a convenience product, especially in certain markets such as gyms, schools, offices or certain locales where water quality is known to be poor.)

So when you really look at it and think about it, long copy always wins. Always. It’s just not a long copy salesletter every time. Granted, after a period of time, it’s not always needed when the audience is pre-sold, or when the product is a low-priced convenience product.

Bottom line, copy doesn’t need to do a job that’s already been done. So the question is not “how long should your salesletter be?” But rather, “how qualified, targeted and sold is my target market before they even read my salesletter?”

And therein lies the key: the market, not the copy.

Michel Fortin is a direct response copywriter, marketing strategy consultant, and instrumental in some of the most lucrative online businesses and wildly successful marketing campaigns to ever hit the web. For more articles like this one, please visit his blog and subscribe to his RSS feed.

  • http://www.nathangilder.com Nathan Gilder

    Jack, I appreciate your thoughts on this.

    I’m launching a new product to a group of people that are -extremely- busy on a day-to-day basis. I mean, far more busy than most people. There was a big debate about the long copy, because I have a 23pg sales letter that reads well… but it’s long. Just looking at a sales letter like that when you don’t see them every day, because this is a very non-techie market, is daunting and seems likely to reduce potential sales (test that headline, sure).

    Now I’m thinking about taking the basis of the salesletter and producing a video instead. And I really think the next step isn’t to debate short vs long copy, but traditional methods vs multimedia. The obvious concern with a video is that, once produced, it’s difficult, time consuming and expensive to edit.

    Thanks again

    Nathan

    Nathan Gilders last blog post..Using Photographs to Enhance Videos of a Static Scene

  • http://www.mymonkbuddy.com Ilias Glenis

    Hi Jack, very good article.

    In response to the above…

    “The price, the industry and particularly the target market play a significant role.”

    I have a product that I use both a short copy, and long copy to sell.

    The short copy I use on eBay…

    eBay Buyers are generally stingy and have shorter attention spans, and tend to purchase more impulsively. So I use about 20% of the copy I use on my main landing page at my website, where I have the long copy for people who are literally seeking to buy online, doing searches and research before they buy etc.

    Interestingly, I’m in the process of revamping all of my marketing. And the irony I’m experiencing from this article, is I’m going to test a new version of my long copy sales letter, by combining everything I learned from these two supposedly distinct, short vs. long sales copy approaches.

    The conversion for my eBay sales is way higher than my website sales, but I’m not getting the same price for my product.

    That’s a very important point to pay close attention to.

    I recommend that because every niche needs to be approached with scientist like scrutiny, that copy writers test both approaches and then merge the best of both worlds to balance the outcome.

    The fact is, that more and more people are limited on time and money, and very few people take the time to read long copy.

    That’s why audio and video presentations on your landing page can help boost conversions so much, because your buyers want to be informed, yet are sometimes too lazy to read your long copy before they buy.

    Make it as easy for your customers as you can when applying long copy.

    Long copy is essential to provide the facts, the benefits, and most copy writers know that you want to answer as many questions a buyer has on their mind, so they get all the facts to make an informed buying decision.

    So in essence, we don’t want to cut any corners as copy writers. At the same time, long copy requires a great deal of skill to hold the prospect’s attention.

    Kind regards,
    Ilias Glenis
    http://www.MyMonkBuddy.com

  • http://www.VideoProductionTips.com Lorraine Grula

    Great article Michael.

    I always had a difficult time believing that long copy usually out performs short copy because personally, long sales copy infuriates me and I will NEVER read it all. Junk mail that goes on for pages always ends up in my trashcan. However, I know I am not typical and long usually sells better when it comes to snail mail offers.

    My personal theory for that is that nobody actually reads it all, they just skim, and bulk convinces many people that it MUST be truly cuz surly they couldn’t just make up all that stuff.

    Well, of course they could but that’s beside the point.

    If you compare video to plain copy, video will probably always perform better.

    When you translate the discussion of length to video, brief is almost always better and that has been proven over and over.

    So go figure.

    Video editing doesn’t have to be difficult, expensive and time consuming Nathan. (Is this where I plug my free video editing tutorials on video production tips dot com?)

    Lorraine Grula

    Lorraine Grulas last blog post..What Style of Video Works Best?

  • http://affiliate-bookmarks.com Bill Vlasak

    I have read many a post by your guest,Michel Fortin, and as a copywriter and teacher he is one of the best.Until I read this post I was undecided between the merits of long and short copy only because many of the countless sales pages I have read seem to be written for ‘new customers’ only.Knowing what I have just learned,must or should a product developer write 2 sales pages : one for “strangers’ and one for “trusting past clients” of his or of successful affiliates ? [The terms in quotes referring to pre-sold or not.]

    • http://www.jackhumphrey.com/ Jack Humphrey

      It’s not a bad idea to target your copy to the audience you send to it as much as possible. If you have control over the demographics who view certain pieces, then certainly you’d want to write copy that speaks directly to them rather than rely on a catch-all letter. That’s the preferred and better performing system, but most people (due to time or inexperience) never go beyond the one size fits all approach.

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